Critical Commentary (Week 5)

This week's critical commentary, I wanted to dive deeper into the context we posed last class about clarity vs obscurity and sound vs sense. At first, hearing it in terms of my workshop piece I couldn't really formulate an understanding about it, but now just looking at my piece gives me a greater depth. Sonically, The texture of what was being said was smooth, almost an alluring sense of bringing the listener into the scene, which is nice, but I'd rather let the writing do that and let the performance give way to a deeper context not found in constantly reading what is on the page. As for the draft itself, while it may have had some strong points, the emergence of form would really give my piece a structure that would lend itself to better understanding of what is taking place within the piece. Possibly taking note of my peers use of how they structure their lines to get many possible ideas on revising will help in the long run, for performance as well as generation of lines.